這些雅思寫作開頭考官可能不喜歡

大家知道考官最討厭的雅思作文開頭是什么嗎?有些人只知道被模板以為這樣就萬無一失了，其實(shí)在備考雅思寫作的時(shí)候還是要多多積累豐富的素材，學(xué)習(xí)地道的語言表達(dá)方式，一定要多動(dòng)手寫!斷地練習(xí)和修改，才能提升雅思寫作能力。

01

中式英語

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★★

上榜理由：用中式英文開頭，不僅會(huì)讓考官看不懂，還暴露了你的語言功底，語料積累匱乏，是雅思寫作中的大忌。

比如：

寫作主題 1：The happiest moment in your life

案例：In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

寫作主題 2：The population problem

案例：The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

寫作主題 3：Is there fairness in today’s business world?

案例：I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

02

胡亂翻譯中國(guó)俗語

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★★

上榜理由：胡亂翻譯中國(guó)俗語會(huì)起反作用，畢竟考官對(duì)中國(guó)俗語并不“感冒”，反而會(huì)引起考官反感。

比如：

寫作主題 1：Is it good to have a large family?

案例：I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

寫作主題 2：Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

案例：Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……

寫作主題 3：The advantage of being a nice person

案例：I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.

03

超級(jí)啰嗦

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★☆

上榜理由：開篇就要主題明了清晰，上來就啰啰嗦嗦表達(dá)不清，考官自然認(rèn)為你的觀點(diǎn)模糊，甚至不會(huì)表達(dá)。

比如：

寫作主題 1：Should college students be allowed to get married?

案例：This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

寫作主題 2：Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?

案例：Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

04

偏離主題

討厭指數(shù)：★★★★☆

上榜理由：文不對(duì)題自然會(huì)扣分，給考官留下的印象就是跑題，想想整體寫作分?jǐn)?shù)還會(huì)高么?

比如：

寫作主題：It is said that nowadays one can‘t acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

案例：I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

05

觀點(diǎn)不明朗

討厭指數(shù)：★★★☆☆

上榜理由：雅思大作文很重要的一點(diǎn)就是你的邏輯性和觀點(diǎn)，如果觀點(diǎn)都不明確，后面的舉例證明等都會(huì)缺乏說服力，自然分?jǐn)?shù)也不會(huì)高。

比如：

寫作主題：Should college students be allowed to get married?

案例：I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

06

語法錯(cuò)誤不斷

討厭指數(shù)：★★★☆☆

上榜理由：涉及到雅思寫作評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中的語法多樣性和準(zhǔn)確性，語法錯(cuò)誤不斷自然會(huì)成為扣分點(diǎn)。

比如：

寫作主題：If children behave badly, should their parents acceptresponsibility and also be punished?

案例：about this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents arenot right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility.

07

意思重復(fù)

討厭指數(shù)：★★★☆☆

上榜理由：反復(fù)重復(fù)一個(gè)意思，讓考官會(huì)覺得你并沒有什么可以表達(dá)的，或者詞匯表達(dá)能力有限，自然也會(huì)扣分。

比如：

寫作主題：Your opinion on DINK families

案例：My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

08

觀點(diǎn)絕對(duì)化

討厭指數(shù)：★★★☆☆

上榜理由：考生在使用語言描述事物或者表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，應(yīng)盡可能避免語言過于絕對(duì)化，更應(yīng)該注意該語言中非絕對(duì)化表達(dá)方式的學(xué)習(xí)，這樣才能盡顯文章內(nèi)容的客觀性。

比如：

寫作主題 1：The importance of confidence

案例：In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.

寫作主題 2：The solution to the traffic problem

案例：I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

09

內(nèi)容過分簡(jiǎn)單

討厭指數(shù)：★★☆☆☆

上榜理由：考官想給你打分都沒有內(nèi)容，所以切記盡量豐富內(nèi)容，尤其不要照搬題目。

比如：

寫作主題：The importance of environmental protection

案例：This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

10

用詞不當(dāng)

討厭指數(shù)：★★☆☆☆

上榜理由：用詞不當(dāng)會(huì)暴露你的詞匯，而且評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中談到“在不同的語境中，使用正確的詞性;”所以在使用詞匯的時(shí)候，正確性也是非常重要的。如果想要取得更高的分?jǐn)?shù)，那么詞匯的多樣性也要更多的納入考慮。切記，不要用口語化的表達(dá)!

比如：

寫作主題 1：The importance of confidence

案例：In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.

寫作主題 2：The solution to the traffic problem

案例：I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

開頭切記不要用中式英語表達(dá)，多積累地道的英語表達(dá)。表達(dá)的觀點(diǎn)要客觀明確，切勿模棱兩可絕對(duì)化。內(nèi)容要清晰明了，切勿反復(fù)啰嗦，也不能一句話代之。注意詞性使用，減少語法錯(cuò)誤，不要生搬硬套“華麗辭藻”。

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